You've Got Five Pages...To Tell Me It's Good

Jean Lee
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Formerly Story Cuppings! Every month we visit the local library to randomly select a new release and read its first chapter. As writers, we are told that those opening pages are crucial to hooking readers. So, let's see if the first chapter successfully hooks picky readers as well as teaches fellow hardworking writers. Cheers!

  1. You've Got Five Pages, The Faith of Beasts by James S.A. Corey, to Tell Me You're Good.

    May 29

    You've Got Five Pages, The Faith of Beasts by James S.A. Corey, to Tell Me You're Good.

    NOTE: In the podcast, I refer to book 1 of this trilogy as The Captive's War, but that is the title of the whole trilogy. Book 1 is called The Mercy of Gods.------- Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! So a huge disclaimer here: I grabbed the second book of a trilogy, which means we are NOT going to see much foundation work in the opening pages. We'll have to hit the ground running, and like it! Frankly, though, that's okay. It was nice to get into some science fiction for a change, and Corey's got a lovely style to his voice. The first couple of pages aren't a prologue per se--more like an historical tidbit akin to all the histories of Paul Moadib that begin the chapters of Dune. That historical bit is only a few paragraphs, but it's almost lyrical in its sadness about a dying world, how it's seen in the crops, fish, and lost voices of the elders. It's a relatable moment: any reader could sense what this would feel like in their culture. Any culture has its feelings about end-times. And this book begins with that bit of foreboding. It doesn't outstay its welcome, either--after a few paragraphs, we move on to the proper first chapter. Now the first couple of pages are all these snippets of librarian records. I was amused by just how many librarians there are--my kind of alien society, I guess. :) I gather that these records allude to things from the first book, so I can't really judge their merits. To Corey's credit, though, the next few pages bring readers up to speed on important past events, such as the failed human rebellion against their alien overlords--and that our human protagonist, Dafyd, was on the side of the aliens. Why? That I can't glean from these opening pages, but I have a feeling Book 1 (The Mercy of Gods) or subsequent pages of Book 2 will tell us. Overall, Corey's got an accessible style, one that balances relatable detail with the unrelatable alien world. If you're looking to jump off Earth for a while, Corey's trilogy is sure to lose you among the stars. And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    21 min
  2. You've Got Five Pages, The Murder at World's End by Ross Montgomery, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Apr 24

    You've Got Five Pages, The Murder at World's End by Ross Montgomery, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! Could my prologue curse be broken at last! Here's another book that shows an author understands the power of a prologue done right. The prologue sets the time period of the story: 1910, the days of Halley's Comet's chaos among folks all over. The historical exposition is balanced well with what's going on with one Stephen Pike, a former convict ready to turn a new leaf--if only he could get a job so that turning could start. The prologue ends with May 18th: the day folks could take pictures of Halley's Comet because it was only 12 hours from Earth, and the day Pike receives a mysterious letter offering him a job at the grand estate World's End. The prologue is only two pages long, but it provides a solid foundation of the world's collective craziness alongside Stephen Pike's desperation. I always worry that Chapter 1 will pull a bait-and-switch on readers after such solid prologues. We've seen that happen here often enough. Thankfully, Montgomery continues the momentum in Chapter 1, picking right up where the prologue leaves off with one major change: we're experiencing the story through Stephen's point of view. There are slight changes in cadence and word choice, slight changes in grammar, and these little changes add up to a clear, working-class voice modern readers can follow easily. The first chapter focuses strictly on Stephen's interview with the head butler of Tithe Hall, who insists that "there's been some sort of mistake" and that Pike is not going to be hired. Now as readers, we know differently because there wouldn't be a story if Pike weren't hired. But that's not the point. This scene tactfully previews the kinds of situations ex-con Stephen will likely face when dealing with the "honest" working class in the Downstairs of Tithe Hall, not to mention the nobility class of the Upstairs. The scene is propelled along by dialogue with touches of Stephen's thoughts; the pacing isn't bogged down once, not even when Stephen's trying to figure out how he could possibly get back to London if the butler turns him out. I had never heard of Montgomery before this book, and it could be due to his writing children's books before entering the adult fiction market. He's clearly got a passion and flair for the mystery genre, and I'm excited to see how history and fiction come together in the chapters ahead. And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    22 min
  3. You've Got Five Pages, Mask of the Deer Woman by Laurie L. Dove, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Mar 27

    You've Got Five Pages, Mask of the Deer Woman by Laurie L. Dove, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! There's a lot to dig for the suspense/mystery lovers here. Prologues ALWAYS put me on my guard, but Dove utilizes the prologue to establish reader investment in a character who's about to disappear--and that disappearance is the catalyst for our protagonist's involvement in the mystery. The first page and a half of the prologue already provide a solid narrative twist; we go from a girl wandering the dark on her own to learning she's an ambitious student determined to locate beetles the Western world assumes are extinct. We also see some effective prose work with sharp, short sentences, often framed in their own paragraphs. "She was going home" sounds relatable, welcoming, something folks often do to deal with tough school days...unless one goes home to find her way out, which is exactly what Chenoa thinks when she finds her precious beetles: "It was her way out." But then another sharp sentence cuts in: "The night sounds close in." And in a rapid supply of small paragraphs and even smaller sentence fragments, Chenoa is no longer alone. Or safe. Now Chapter 1 goes back in time a little bit, which is a pretty common storytelling move in film, television, and novels. I'm not a fan of it, but I can also appreciate the time jump takes us to the protagonist, Carrie Starr. And here's where I goofed in my podcast regarding character names: I thought Odeina was a different name for the protagonist Carrie Starr, but that was a different character introducing herself. That's what I get for cutting off after five pages, lol. That said, the first part of Chapter 1 also packs a lot about Carrie into a tight space: her unhappiness being back on the rez, her unhappiness with her job, and her propensity to drink. Here's a character who needs to rise to the challenge, and it sounds like the mystery of MASK OF THE DEER WOMAN will give her the chance to do just that. And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    22 min
  4. You've Got Five Pages, Alchemised by SenLinYu, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Feb 27

    You've Got Five Pages, Alchemised by SenLinYu, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! Now I admit that I was hesitant at first when I opened the book and saw a prologue. But thankfully, this prologue did its job. In its single page, we meet Helena as she struggles to keep her memories while in "stasis," a sensory deprivation container where she is jolted with electricity every few hours until "someone" comes to get her. Only that someone does not come. Helena loses her sense of time, but she knows her purpose: "She had to stay ready." Not that she tells readers what that means. And that's okay. I don't want an exposition dump in the prologue. Chapter 1 starts with two men discovering Helena, who was "stored wrong," and she lashes out to try and escape even though her senses are completely overwhelmed. They knock her out, and she wakes to hear a woman speak of carrying her to "Central" because there are no prisoner records of Helena, and yet she has two numbers. She's also alive and literally kicking, unlike most of the other statis residents. I tip my hat to SenLinYu for using Helena's lack of senses for storytelling purposes. Helena can't see or move around much, so the only input Helena--and therefore readers--can get in these early pages is through dialogue. And SenLinYu uses that dialogue to accomplish some quick worldbuilding without overwhelming the readers. There's a High Necromancer mentioned, and the woman orders that any corpses in stasis chambers should be reanimated for labor. WHAAAAAT? But the dust jacket did mention necromancy, and here we are on the third page of the book hearing about the necromancy. There's also a degree of science involved in this world, too, for Helena was in some sort of special gel and often jolted with electricity. And on top of all that, there is also magic besides necromancy, for the woman alters Helena's senses to make it easier for her to use her eyes. The prose style here is solid, too. SenLinYu reminds me a little of Lee Child, putting a mix of short and long sentences to use so that the narrative pacing is fast without the prose feeling choppy. A good example comes when Helena is first awoken by the men going through all the stasis chambers. "Light was stabbing her. A spike driven through her eyes, burrowing into her skull. Gods, her eyes.She writhed. The brightness blurred, careening. The burn of fluid rushed down her throat. A roar in her ears." If the first five pages are any indication, SenLinYu's got a lovely debut on their hands. And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    20 min
  5. You've Got Five Pages, Evil Bones by Kathy Reichs, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Jan 30

    You've Got Five Pages, Evil Bones by Kathy Reichs, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! The prologue focuses on an elderly woman who should not bedriving in a rainstorm. She constantly puts herself down through all the prayers and panic in the weather. While this emotional/environmental pacing works fine, the prose here gets...odd. For example: Brake now! A cluster of panicky neurons bellowed.Waiting until you can safely pull off! a more rational gaggle countermanded. Bellowing neurons countermanded by a gaggle of neurons.... Come again? Awkward bits like this made it very difficult to care whatwas going on with this woman, and considering this book is a thriller, I should care about what happens to this vulnerable old woman. But this is a prologue, and with such awkward prose I'm just powering through to see what Chapter 1 islike. And sure enough, Chapter 1 is different. It's first-personnarration from Temperance the protagonist, bemused by a frog she hears outside her office. She's supposed to be annotating reports from all her cases that year, and she lists some major categories of those cases involving skeletalremains, how they're found, etc. Typically, exposition like this could turn readers off, but after that awkward prologue, I found this approach refreshing. I'm a first-timer with this series, and within a page and a half I got a good senseof this character, her personality, and her field of expertise. Plus, by page 3 of the first chapter, Temperance is called to visit an old lady who crashed her car in a storm because she was shocked by an animal mutilation. Why on earth did we need the prologue when the first chapter was going to warp us over to the scene of the crime anyway? Yet another case of the prologue doing no favors. The firstchapter could have hooked us and reeled us in for the inciting incident without a problem. Readers do not have to see preludes to The Incident, especially when that prelude is prioritizing elements barely tangential to the storyline. Letreaders imagine the prelude on their own terms, or allow unreliable character narrators to share their perspectives. It's just another way to throw fresh layers of mystery over the plot to keep readers moving forward, ever curious about what hides in the storm. And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    17 min
  6. You’ve Got Five Pages, Alchemy of Secrets by Stephanie Garber, to Tell Me You’re Good.

    11/28/2025

    You’ve Got Five Pages, Alchemy of Secrets by Stephanie Garber, to Tell Me You’re Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of variousstories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook anaudience! Honestly, I've a few gripes here. For one, I really don't like second-person for a pov. Just because one can do a thing doesn't mean one should. It's also jarring because the book doesn't stay in second-person; only the prologue talks to readers like they are the protagonist Holland finding the mysterious theater with the mysterious college class about folklore. Don't get me wrong: the theater's beautifully described, and Garber knows how to build up tension by using the present tense for Holland — well, the reader — waiting for that class to start. But it's a weird shift putting readers into Holland's shoes for three pages before yanking them out for a more traditional third-person in the first chapter. The true first chapter starts with a date and some exposition about this too-perfect guy that Holland is seeing, aaaaand I was already getting a bit bored when my reading ended with her discovering a poster mentioned in her mysterious folklore class. There's a lot of promise here with the magical underworld of L.A., and fans of Garber are likely accustomed to her writing quirks to be ready for pov shifts and meet-cute exposition. But the magic of that theater in the prologue felt like a bait-and-switch. It can be tough to know when a story truly begins. It feels like Garber considers Holland's date and search for something she heard about in the folklore class to be the start of the story...but if readers don't know about the magic of the class, then they won't understand Holland's determination to do that search. The prologue feels like a cheat to cover this, and I'm just not a fan. I'm taking December off from blogging and podcasting, so we'll have to see what stories await us in the new year! Stay tuned! And what will we discover in the next story's five pages?We'll have to wait and see. xxxx Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    18 min
  7. You've Got Five Pages, The Lake Escape by Jamie Day, to Tell Me You're Good.

    10/24/2025

    You've Got Five Pages, The Lake Escape by Jamie Day, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! I admit that I wasn't sure what to expect from this one. I knew it to be some sort of suspense thriller, but the blurb on my hardcover from the library says, "Still waters run deadly." I was hoping for some sort of lake monster! Alas, I have no idea if such a monster awaits or not. Day starts this book with two little, um, blocks of text. They're not prologues per se; one is a newspaper excerpt about a dead body found near the lake, and one is about the lake waking up in spring, and danger lurks there. These two "mini-beginnings" before the actual beginning felt a bit awkward, but I gave the author a pass. They're establishing a sense of menace and foreshadowing, right? They want to make sure the reader catches this important information so they don't miss it in the regular storytelling. Fine.Chapter 1 officially begins with protagonist Julia infuriated because her lifelong friend had the audacity to build a new lake house that obstructs the view of the lake from her lake house. There's extra emphasis on how she and her husband are broke, yet they got a fancy new car and, well, have a lake house on top of wherever else they live. She cannot believe she'll have to take a different kind of walk down to the lake. She cannot believe her friend installed art in the yard. She cannot believe some trees were cleared. And surely their other friend and fellow lake house owner will be just as mad. I had to stop after three pages of this. Stories need characters readers can connect with. Yes, some stories can star assholes. Plenty of classics contain such characters. Heavens, I've written such characters. But there has to be an ability to connect SOMEWHERE, and listening to someone complain about how their friend changed up their house and ruined their lake view got very tiring very fast. Sure, maybe this pettiness speaks to the protagonist's character and possible character arc. But the first five pages need to compel readers to read on, at least to chapter 2. A writer shouldn't assume that a brief news report of discovered skeletal remains will be enough to keep regular readers engaged while a protagonist complains nonstop about a privileged kind of problem. Let’s see what next month’s find will teach us, shall we? Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    18 min
  8. You've Got Five Pages, Breathe In, Bleed Out by Brian McAuley, to Tell Me You're Good.

    09/26/2025

    You've Got Five Pages, Breathe In, Bleed Out by Brian McAuley, to Tell Me You're Good.

    Welcome back, my fellow creatives! Yup, I'm back to looking at the first five pages of various stories, for those five pages can make or break the engagement of a reader--or an agent. So, let's scope out the stories of others to see how they hook an audience! It's not often I see fake-outs in a book, but be damned if McAuley doesn't pull it off MULTIPLE TIMES in just half a dozen pages.The first line packs a punch: "Dragging a body through six inches of snow is even harder than I expected." A reader can make plenty of assumptions based on the first line, let alone the first page. We first meet the narrator the dead body of someone named Ben through the snow. At first, I thought she was dragging him to bury him in the wilderness, but then on the second page we learn she wants to get his body back to his family because he deserves a proper funeral...though what happened to him, we don't know, only that his chest is full of puncture wounds. But by the fourth page, Ben's body disappears to be replaced by a ghost addressing Hannah. And then Hannah wakes with Ben alive by her side. And then cold starts setting in with Ben interrogating her about his death. And then he vanishes, and Hannah is alone.McAuley deftly balances the immediate action of each page, whether it's hauling a carcass in the snow or a loving embrace with one's partner. The focus is on the moment, and because of that, readers are immediately digging for clues about what happened with Ben on the mountain and why they were there to begin with. Of course, one needn't give away the mystery so quickly, but it's fascinating for a ghost/dream version of the dead to ask the narrator what happened and she doesn't answer. Is she hiding it from ghost, or merely her own conscience? She's certainly doing a damn good job hiding it from the readers! So I guess I'd better keep reading to find out what happened. :) Let’s see what next month’s find will teach us, shall we? Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

    20 min
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Formerly Story Cuppings! Every month we visit the local library to randomly select a new release and read its first chapter. As writers, we are told that those opening pages are crucial to hooking readers. So, let's see if the first chapter successfully hooks picky readers as well as teaches fellow hardworking writers. Cheers!

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